A link to James’ website can be found here.

Hey James,

I have chosen to review your creative blog 2 where you have written a replicate of Banjo Paterson’s poem, “The Man from Snowy River.”

Firstly, I like how you have provided evidence of you stimulus as it allows the audience to be more involved in your poem. By doings so, readers can also picture in their own minds the Great Ocean Road if they had never heard of or seen it before. It adds a uniqueness to your blog as it does not just consist of writing.

Secondly, I love how you have written your own thoughts and authors note at the bottom of your stanza. It intrigued me as I was surprised you haven’t visited (neither have I), but could clearly imagine what the road and start of the ocean would feel like.

I don’t believe you have realised that you have repeated the same sentence twice with slightly different grammar, just look at your blog once posted to avoid any future mistakes like this.

“Perhaps one day I will have the opportunity to venture down to “The Great Ocean Road” and personally write about the landscape I see from my own eyes.

Perhaps one day I will have the opportunity to venture down “The Great Ocean Road” and personally write about the landscape from my own eyes.”

Now to your stanza,

Eyes Lead Me Nowhere

Where sand meets water, as pillar-like rocks raise

       All the way from the depths of the ocean,

Immersing the naked eye, where the wind unintentionally sways

    Your hair from front to back in a single motion,

Your eyes look out with no end in sight and perhaps

There lies the destinations beauty, its unknown postcode,

You’ll unknowingly let so much of your time elapse,

At Australia’s very own “The Great Ocean Road”.

I was impressed at how well you have written this stanza! It has the same rhythm and likeness to the vast Australian landscape that is exhibited in Paterson’s poem. I don’t believe I can attempt to edit this stanza as you have eloquently encapsulated all aspects of the question and revealed your creative ability in this blog. I particularly like the line, “its unknown postcode” as it demonstrates the vastness of Australia which is still yet to be explored and experienced by people like myself.

Well done James.