Hey Tyler!

I was very captivated by your creative piece! It was written with such vivid imagery and beautifully encapsulates the realities of working in the Australian environment. I can easily understand your words and you clearly develop a strong relationship between yourself and the landscape. I also appreciate your final sentences where you provide readers with a reflection of their own lives and leave them pondering on how they can appreciate the little things more in life.

I like your use of short and long sentences, it keeps the readers eager to learn what will happen next. However, I do believe that more editing within those sentences will do your work more justice. Such as,     ” The summer after I turned sixteen provided me with a life changing experience.”  to “The life changing experience occurred in the summer after I turned sixteen.” I also feel the subtle change of tenses throughout your work which may need to be looked further.

Your blog can be brought to life with an image of the Australian landscape and I think that will even further attract readers to your blog (see featured image on my blog).

Well done Tyler, I thoroughly enjoyed your work!

Tyler’s blog can be found here .